Power Writing Mrs Mc Dermott YHS By

Power Writing Mrs. Mc. Dermott YHS

By Using Three Numbers, Power Writing Assigns the Value of: • 1 st Power- Main ideas, topic sentences, and topic paragraphs • 2 nd Power- Major details that explain main ideas • 3 rd power- Minor details that elaborate upon or clarify details

Stage 1 Word Power Stage 2 Phrase Power Stage 3 Sentence Power Stage 4 Powergraph 122 Stage 5 Powergraph 12323 Stage 6 Powergraph 12323 - Active Voice (No “to be” verbs) • Stage 7 Sentence Patterns • 1232323, 1233233233, etc. Powergraphs • • •

Stage 1 -Word Power 1. Cities 2. Roads 3. Families 4. Disasters 5. Music 6. Friends 7. Games 8. Lies 9. Vacations 10. Jobs Roads

Stage 2 - Phrase Power • A phrase a NOT a complete sentence 1. big cities in Arizona 2. roads in Buckeye 3. famous families 4. major national disasters 5. music I like • Turn the rest of the words in stage 1 into phrases

Stage-3 Sentence Power • For our purposes right now, all stage 3 sentences will start with “there are two” • Turn your phrases into “there are two” sentences 1. There are two big cities in Arizona I like to visit. 2. There are two major roads in Buckeye. 3. There are two famous families I admire. • Turn the rest of your phrases into “there are two” sentences

More Stage-3 Practice • Turn the following phrases into “there are two” sentences 1. Countries of Europe 2. Names of children 3. Leaders of the world 4. Professional sports in America 5. States in the southwest 6. Fast cars 7. Movies for children 8. Stores in Buckeye

Stage 4 122 • After practicing power 1 (topic) sentences we are ready to move on to stage 4 • A power 2 represents concrete detail. Here you mention specifically what you are talking about • You will use transitions followed by a comma

Major Transitions • • For example For instance To clarify Additionally First- NO such word as firstly Second (ly) Third (ly) Basically

Set up • Power 1= “There are two…” sentence • Power 2= Name the two things (the support) • (1) There are two mean teachers at BUHS. • So now name the two teachers in a complete sentence (make sure you have a verb) • (2) To begin, Ms. Ramey is wickedly evil. • (2) Finally, her brother, Mr. Ramey, yells at us all the time.

Example • Cities in Arizona (1) There are two cities in Arizona I would like to visit. (2) For example, Flagstaff is home to many unique things. (2) Furthermore, Phoenix has a lot of entertaining things to do.

Another Example • Roads in Buckeye (1) There are two roads in Buckeye the police always watch. (2) First, there is MC 85 which cuts through the town. (2) Next, Miller Road always has people speeding down it.

Stage 5 12323 1= Topic Sentence 2=Concrete Detail (supporting the topic sentence) 3=Commentary- More specific explanations

• Word= Students Example (1)There are two students I am very close to. (2) First, there is Danny. (3) Specifically, I have had him in class for the last three years for journalism, English 4, AP Lit and Comp, and English 101 -102. (2) Next, I am very close to Ryan. (3) For example, sometimes we hang out after school and talk about our problems.

Another Example (1)There are two cities in Arizona I would like to visit. (2) For example, Flagstaff is home to many unique things. (3) Specifically, there is NAU and Snow Bowl. (2) Furthermore, Phoenix has a lot of entertaining things to do. (3) For instance, we can go to an AZ Diamondback baseball game.

Your Turn • Take the phrase “stores in Buckeye” and make a 12323 powergraph • Label each sentence as a 1, 2, or 3

Turn these phrases into a 12323 1. students at school 2. tasty foods 3. things that stink (don’t use bad words) 4. fun things 5. attractive people

No, There Are Two Sentences • Develop a 12323 powergraph without the use of “There are two” • Olympics • Candy • Cell Phones

Stage 6 - “no to be verbs” • The passive voice in writing is boring and imprecise. • By using an active voice your writing comes alive and becomes more detailed.

“To Be” or passive verbs • • Be Is Are Were Was Being Been Am

Example powergraph • I enjoy shopping at two different stores in Buckeye • First, you can always find everything you need at Wal-Mart. • For example, they have food, clothes, and sporting goods. • Next, Fry’s carries a wide variety of foods. • Specifically, they sell chips, cereal, and steak.

Your turn: Turn these passive sentences into active ones (hint, the rewrite may be shorter than the original) 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. Mike is a student I am a writer Sandra and Ryan are happy Maria was here yesterday Brandon and Erik were absent Martin is being naughty Sophia has been here all day

More Practice 8. I’m reading the book The Great Gatsby 9. We’re going to have fun this semester. 10. They’re having their party over there. 11. I am playing in a tournament this weekend. 12. Jose will be getting an A for the class. 13. Mr. Seward can be very talkative at times. 14. We are going to BUHS in order to learn.

Stage 7 Sentence Patterns- for use on power one sentences 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. Strong, active verb Ask a question Use an exclamatory sentence Open with an adverb Open with a prepositional phrase Open with an adverbial clause Use parallel structure Use apposition

Strong Active Verb Examples • Two problems perplexed the students • The police dogs patrolled two areas • Cats purr for two strange reasons

A question • What two places in the world would I like to visit? • What two types of candy do I like? • Where would I like to go to college?

An Exclamation • Wow, two happy events occurred in my life! • Two terrible things happened today! • I want a ride on a camel for two reasons!

Prepositional Phrase Opener • In Southern California, a tourist will find two unique spots of interest. • Through my magic glasses, I saw two awesome sights. • Down the street, live two interesting people.

Apposition • Buckeye, a suburb of Phoenix, offers its residence two fun activities. • Ramey, my English teacher, appears weird for two reasons. • Chipotle, my favorite restaurant, makes two real tasty dishes.

Parallel Structure • Washing dishes, cleaning house, and doing laundry annoy me for two reasons. • Listening in class, following directions, and finishing assignments make me proud of myself in two ways. • Baseball, hockey, and football excite me for two reasons.

Adverbial Clause Opener • If I was lost, I would do two things. • While I shopped for clothes, I discovered two ways to save money. • After Ramey gave us homework, the class thanked him for two things.

Adverb Opener • Wisely, Sam made two course decisions. • Happily, she made her parents proud for two reasons. • Suddenly, as I slept in the woods late at night, I heard two strange noises.

Your Turn • Using each type of sentence pattern (8) label the sentence pattern and write a power one sentence for the following: – Classes at school – Strong Active Verb Example – Choosing two elective classes at school proved exciting

Stage 8 • Stage 8 wraps everything up. • Keep doing what you’ve been doing but you are just adding more detail • 1233233233 • 1232323 • Ect.

1232323 example • (1)In the morning, I do three things before I go to school. (2) First, I wake up. (3) For example, my alarm is set at 7: 04 am. (2) Next, I brush my teeth. (3) Specifically, I use Crest toothpaste. (2) Finally, I fix my hair. (3) For instance, I wet my hair, then rub some hair glue to give it a spiky look.

1233233233 Example • (1)BUHS should have a closed campus for all students. (2)First of all, safety should be the number one concern. (3) For example, students are in a rush during lunch and may exceed the speed limit. (3) Moreover, every year there is at least one major car accident involving students during lunch.

1233233233 Example • (2) Next, a closed campus helps limit people ditching. (3) Specifically, when a student is forced to stay on campus during lunch, they are more likely to go to their next class. (3) Statistically, more students ditch during fourth period than any other period.

1233233233 Example • (2) Finally, in order to make a closed campus work, the school needs to provide more food choices. (3) For instance, they could create a food court. (3) Moreover, the school could ask Subway, Pizza Hut, and Mc. Donalds to set up stations to serve the students.

Your Turn • Write a 1232323 powergraph on your thoughts about a closed campus using a strong active verb sentence pattern. • Write a 1233233233 powergraph about something that’s happened in your life using a strong active verb or question sentence pattern.